We would and should hope as we going farther into the future, the world would realize the futility of violence. But as the population of the world keeps growing we will only hear of more violent acts unless the worlds young can be lead to a new way of thinking! And towards that end I thank you for this piece.
I like your review of a review! I write for my own self improvement and for most of us that might be enough. However a bad review still hurts, so my only advice is roll with the flow and keep doing what you like to do. I enjoyed what you've written! (And everyone does like to know if our work has been noticed)
Things out of control, leading to tension and suspense, with a twist that wasn't expected. Excellent writing, with all the p's and q's and i's dotted. Now for more expounding with the minor characters for a longer piece. Sorry, that's my failing. charlie55
I've read parts 1 and 2 of Resurrected Love, and if you have written parts 3,4,5 and 6 you've got a love story I would love to
read. Two lonely people walking through life finding themselves, in ten years, with two little girls siting on his lap, and him, rocking them to sleep. And her, holding there little son. Picture perfect ending! -charlie55
Excellent writing! You ripped my heart out! And if that isn't good writing, I don't know what is! Very well thought out on bringing the story to fruition, with the little girl telling the story, and making the reader apathetic to their plight. I'll have to read more of your stories.- charlie55
I was going great guns a year ago with a story until I remembered I had read the story as a child. Since then I've kept my
writing to, what I would have like to have been, or what I would like to do. All in all, it still takes a lot of work to write something
that I would say is original. As for reading while I have a story in my head that I'm thinking about, I can kiss that story good by. Back to originality! I think if you find a story that sparks your interest, you should take it and improve on it. If anything I've
written falls into this category, take it and run with it!
A well written and interesting piece of fiction about the afterlife. It kept my interest, although I would have liked to have seen the piece extended somewhat. A afterlife code of ethics maybe? How you qualified for the jobs. Did it have anything to do
with your life on Earth? Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed the story!
Very well done. Are dreams a reality? Or is reality nothing more them dreams? You took a thought, and made it almost believable. A trait of a good writer. So I ask you, let your mind wander, do some scribbling, and make my day! From an avid reader, keep writing.-charlie55
Excellent writing. A very good beginning to a story that I would love to read. Nothing more intriguing then a mystery waiting to be solved. Keep writing, I'd love to read more. Reading someone's work is a refection of how their mind works.-charlie55
Excellent writing, and I completely got were you're coming from. Phonestating - Trying to be understood on the phone, while becoming completely frustrated. Used situational comedy in a setting where everyone's been is very funny. Keep writing, your good.-charlie55
Through the eyes of a child. Situational humor at it's best. Problems in the classroom. People like to experience what other people do. Stories are a very good medium, and you did a vary good job with this story. Well written and thought out, with a delivery that was great. Loved it.-charlie55
I consider this piece, not so much to be reviewed, as to be read. However it does stand up to the test of review because
it is masterfully done. The emotion that this work has, the writing does it justice. Thank you for putting it where I could read
it. charlie55
Before I begin, let me say. I read all three items and I found you have a very good grasp of the English language, and a very good imagination. You've tried to let your imagination run wild' which is good, but I like to read believable, hidden agenda,[which you have somewhat] and leave me with something to think about. Keep writing. I think you've got more talent then I have.charlie55
Wow, you writing is so much, much better then any thing I've done. My niece says I have no FLUFF in my writing, and I have to agree. But you have turned the words into descriptions of feelings and insights. The writing came off as how you felt.
If this is true, don't be so hard on yourself.- charlie55
Well written, with pain, hope, drama, and believability, all wrapped into one short story. The 40's code of ethics, walking the line, worrying what the neighbors thought. All were pressures to put family second and acceptance first. Please write and type more stories. I would like to read them. charlie55
Wow. With all that emotion, you should add BRAVE. Brave to express your inmost thoughts, and then do it vary well. You also seem to have a handle on human analytics. Well written and thought out. The only criticism I would venture to say; would be, put a space between lines so my old eyes can read it better.-charlie55
Well written, with a clear understanding of society, and how we need to survive in the now, and the hereafter. I like the transition from focusing on success, to becoming aware of the world around him, to what he needs outside this world. It got a little heavy for lite reading, but what would you take out? Good job.-charlie55
Forgive and Forget. The last paragraph says it all. You've been around the horn, you can write, and you have a lot to share. I found the piece to be well written with a beginning, middle and end. All tied together vary smoothly. You can write. Please keep sharing.charlie55
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