I came across your piece because it was considered one of the highest rated scripts. I'm looking to learn from some of the best and thought I'd review your piece.
Overall feeling of this piece You chose a very smart concept for the plot. I like how you wove in the job interview aspect. Eudora seemed to have her own story within the story and that was great!
Noteworthy items The part of the storyline where you alluded to the seven deadly sins was really imaginative. As a reader, I continued to be intrigued in finding out what would happen to Gary. Awesome job!
Simple Suggestions I don’t think I would change anything. I like the fact that it is rated as a comedy / satire / supernatural. You’ve actually pulled off the topic very well and I admire you for that.
Keep writing!
I am currently in the process of revising / refreshing my own script "Invalid Item" that was originally written in 1992 as a comedy/satire – I’m thinking of possibly reworking it into a short story. Because this is a similar genre, I really would appreciate your feedback. I’d like to know your thoughts on if I should keep it as a satire and soften up a few things or turn it into a more realistic storyline.
This is very well written. I was so captivated with your story that I could not stop reading until I found out what happened in the end.
In the beginning, you can almost believe why he did what he did, but I quickly got the message when you wrote “You were a man who had everything ... Only a man with no conscience could do what you have done.”
All I could say was "Whoa!" Thank you for sharing your gift!!!!!
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Hi Anna:
Overall feeling of this piece 
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Keep writing! 
I am currently in the process of revising / refreshing my own script "
Quite an imagination you have, Lexie
to you!