I'm a big fan of micro fiction and I love what you did with this piece. I could feel the couple's pain as they lost the ring to the ocean as well as their joy in finding it. And you're right...there's nothing to say in moments like those...just something to feel.
What a sweet and sentimental short piece that brings the feel of fall alive. You have a few apostrophe issues like in the second line it should read apples falling from trees (plural). But I enjoyed reading the story and relating to Hunter and John...love makes everything seem more magical!
Wow...what a mature poem. Hard to believe it was written by a 15-year old. You must have been going through something rough at the time...it really comes out in the poem. I hope writing has helped you work your way thru it. It always works for me! Hope to read more of your writing one day soon.
Your analogy hit my sweet spot. We just studied Philemon in the church I attend...I had a hard time finding it in my Bible, too, since the book is only a page or so long! But like with golf, the more you practice the better you get and I bet your fingers know the way to Revelation these days.
This poem really touched my heart as I think the vast majority of us have had lovers we let slip away (or lovers that were stolen from us!). What I wish for you is that you continue on your journey of becoming the very best writer you can be. It is this reviewer's opinion that you are well on your way.
Wow...this story was well-written and suspenseful. The ending took me by surprise! It's hard to believe this is the first short story you've ever written and I hope it won't be the last. Bullying is a real problem and it's nice to see writers tackle the issue. I'm adding your story to my favorites so I can read it again and again.
What a beautiful, sunny poem, Allie. You took the color yellow and gave it a personality. And, I agree with your assessment. Yellow is a cheerful color!
I'd love to see you write more color poems! What personality would you give the color black?
What a lovely poem, Delirium! I have a special place in my heart for children's poems and this one was delightful. The rhyme scheme was perfect...so sing-songy. I could sing this poem to my daughter and she'd love it.
I can clearly visualize the little bird in your poem playing mischievously in the sky. Nice writing!
Wow! It had to be hard work coming up with all those "l" sounds, but you did a great job of incorporating them into your poem,Fyn Pls. I think you have lemonaide misspelled...I think it's "lemonade".
I believe this is my first time reading your work, and I look forward to reading more.
A fun challenger, BIG BAD WOLF! Your word list was intriguing. I've never heard of some of these monsters (neko, naga, kitsune, drider, harpy). I'll have to look them up! Oooh, and some of them were hidden so well that I swore they were not in there! This one took me nearly 18 minutes to solve!
I had a great time solving your word search, which happens to be the first word search I've attempted on writing.com (and the first one I've done on the internet). Your word list was intriguing...I must look up Matteo, Matrix and Xavier as regards to vampires! Finding the words was a very enjoyable challenge!
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