Good satire on a hard subject. I laughed aloud at some of your observations and quirky humor. The way you describe how to overlook some of the earmarks of an aging body, i.e., the hearing is good except for the ringing, really funny. Your essay moved along nicely without being wordy. Good point of view and written well.
I appreciate your poem's intent you made that clear, congratulations on that, however, there is no form to your poem, even free form poems have structure. Try reworking it using stanzas and rhyming pattern(s). I hope this review is helpful. I'm sending GPs as encouragement.
Interesting and involving form. A little wordy but saved by the use of descriptive prose. The writer desribes a totally self-involved person living in the narrow world of his own thoughts and inner emotions. The fact that he was brought out of himself for a short time by his involvement with another person causes an intensive return to his own little self-involved world.
Well done. I enjoyed this item.
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