This is beautiful. It has lots of good imagery and having a nice mood to it. This is well thought out. I like how everything fits together nicely. It catches the spirit of nature perfectly. The poem has a nice flow and good structure. I like how you find a way to connect it to family. That's a nice surprise.
This needs a lot more editing. It is a bit confusing to read. This whole section actually needs to be rewritten. And if you were upset writing this, it shows. But if this is for release grief you're feeling and nothing serious, I hoped it helps you. I wish you the best. I'm sorry for your lost. I hope you feel better.
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