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Review of A Christmas Rain  
Review by C'est la Vie
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I love your prose. The story is detailed and enthralling, and you keep to your characters i.e. the protective older brother, amazed younger brother, entrapped Santa. I really like how you foretell the impending doom by making the laughter of such a stereo typically happy character fade to dismal melancholy before any explanation is given.

This tale is very creative, and offers a witty explanation for why so few believe anymore. I do wish there were more detail about the characters' appearance or the environment, but otherwise, I'm in love with this.
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Review by C'est la Vie
Rated: E | (4.5)
You're poem is very effective and easy to relate to. Not in the ghost sense, but pertaining to the guilty conscience, particulary when averting one's eyes from those in need.
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Review by C'est la Vie
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really like the flow, especially how you began most of the stanzas with 'John Lennon picture this', I think it adds effect. I like it as a poem, but as a song, the ryhming would seem more free flowing and catchy, especially with a nice, repetitive acoustic tune in the back round, something Like Lennon's 'Love' or Emerson, Lake, and Pamer's 'C'est la vie'.
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