Cathryn,
Good piece! You really captured the heart break and heartache that was felt. I really like the way that you strung together the poem without stanzas. That technique really advanced the idea of the person just going from one thought to another without stopping. I felt the pain. I would be interested in some expression of the length of the relationship early in the poem. No break up is easy or painless, but a relationship that has gone on for a long period of time where there is trust by one person is all the more agonizing. I loved the finality of the last sentence. It really brought across the feeling that the speaker was done with this person.
Good job.
Doughnut
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