Nikki B,
Your piece is nice but you lost me at the first stanza. I read it twice to see if the second time around would make an impression. You see I was raised around music and rap I do not like or country just a little. I think, if you could have possibly included some song titles within your poem, I would have been able to better relate. Also was it your intentions to omit all punctuation? Nice try. Keep on trucking.
Jessicalynn,
You have captured the feelings, we all encounter at one time or another. I know I am at that point right now and it give me comfort to know I am now alone. I expect you are not new to this venture and therefore can always find a topic to write about. Keep on trucking. You are great in my book.
Hi Molly,
I too find your story long, but funny. I am getting used to Madlibs now. The only real problem I found is that you do not separate into paragraphs. This makes it hard to read. I can wait u ntil you do another one. Keep on trucking.
You had a trial quiz based on your history. Where can a summary of your existance be found in the web-site? I failed the test because I have never seen the details. Please advise. I think it would be good for all newbies to know this information. Thanks!
BrainCrumbs,
I had to read your piece twice to feel your rythum. I know you are poking fun but I am sure someone will take it to heart. There are some parts that are unclear. In paragraph three do you mean to have Except? Or should it be Accept? Paragraph do you really mean there or should it be their? As this is your piece only you know if it needs to be revised. Keep on trying.
Anna,
Short and sweet. I don't like pumpkin per se. But, I once make a pumpking and black soup that was tasty. I am also not a connoisseur of plants so I am not sure if a geranium is consider small. But I liked your recipe. Keep up the good work
Even with my words that do not fit in some places, I found the humor of your story. Do not got grocery shipping without being armed. I loved it. Keep up th good work
This item reminds me more of a duel instead of an execution. the rhyming rythum is a little off in the 1st and 2nd stanzas. Keep on working on it. I know you can get it to flow better.
Kenneth,
This is really a good story, one of the best I read today. However, I think you should have broken the story into paragraphs. It would make for easier reading. Keep on trucking your are doing good.
Hello Rayne,
I believe paragraph 4 should say "....left apartment building...." instead of just apartment. You already left the apartment when you "kicked the toilet paper into the elevator." I chuckled at the first incident but I found the other two a little vindictive.
Why take you Monday blues out on someone else who is also suffering the same malady, making her day much worst. Keep up the good work but not the habits.
Girl,
I know the feeling. I also have a book by my desk to record in long hand, any instructions I receive. I even record any info I get from web-sites I join. This I believe can be helpful when chating with your computer manufacturer. Well Meg, It has been a long day for me so I wish you pleasant dreams until later.
A Newbie I am. I love the Amazing Race. It is the only reality shop I feel has substance. I am amaze you have made an internal game of a game. Truly wonderful. I will join the group with the next game. Please alert me when it comes about.
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