Hello, just so you understand how I rate poetry this my rubic and my rating is just the average.
/5 choice of wording (t flow nicely, does it sound awkward, powerful wording etc)
/5 spelling/grammar
/5 Does it paint a picture (can i understand/vision what your poem is trying to say, does it tell a story/message)
/5 Overall impression
Choice of wording 5/5 Great choice of wording, it has powerful wording. It flows really well. No awkwardness at all
Spelling/grammer: 5/5 No mistakes that I notice
Does it paint a picture: 5/5 This totally reminds me of dexter and it dark twisted ways
Overall impression: 4/5 It was well written but Im not a huge fan of dexter and this is totally what this poem reminds me of
Hello, just so you understand how I rate poetry this my rubic and my rating is just the average.
/5 choice of wording (t flow nicely, does it sound awkward, powerful wording etc)
/5 spelling/grammar
/5 Does it paint a picture (can i understand/vision what your poem is trying to say, does it tell a story/message)
/5 Overall impression
choice of wording: 2.5/5The first stanza to me seems awkward. The first three lines flow alright and then you write “a welcome mid the crags” It sounds off base. Again with the second stanza the first three lines really flow well and then the last three seem really out of place. The third stanza while not really showing any strong wording is the stanza that flows the best in the entire poem.
Spelling/grammer 3/5: Stanza 1 line 2 “i” should be “I”
Stanza 3 line 1 “i” should be “I”
Stanza 3 line 3 “skyscapes” should be too words sky scapes
Does it paint a picture: 2/5 I can't really picture what you are talking about. The lack of emotion in the poem is lacking.
Overall impression: 2/5 It has the means to be a powerful poem but it lacking, powerful wording, and emotion. Good luck
Hello, just so you understand how I rate poetry this my rubic and my rating is just the average.
/5 choice of wording (t flow nicely, does it sound awkward, powerful wording etc)
/5 spelling/grammar
/5 Does it paint a picture (can i understand/vision what your poem is trying to say, does it tell a story/message)
/5 Overall impression
Choice of wording: 5/5 The words you chose really make this poem come to life. There is no awkwardness and the wording is very powerful. Good Job
Spelling/grammer: 5/5 No mistakes that I can see
Does it paint a picture: 4/5.
"I dreamed of a wonderful world, free of all sorrow, lying,
An earth, full of bliss, where innocence is exempt from dying.
Laying in the verdant meadow, lulling me to a deep sleep,
I was soon wide awake with a distinct sound of a loud weep."
This is my favourite part of the poem. I can envision what your trying to say and it makes a powerful statement. I too wish for a world without sorrow and lying. The rest of the poem describing the weeping boy was really well written.
Overal Impression: 4.5/5 I throughly enjoyed your poem
Marching along with Death Row,
Soaked in sweat and blood.
Didn't put on a good show
Now we're working in the mud.
The drill sergeant's on my ass,
And I can't keep in step.
I didn't learn from the past
Still not a soldier yet.
March along 2 by 2,
So far away from home;
I have begun to feel so blue,
But I shall never roam.
Keep doing more and more,
Marching through the pain,
Doesn't matter if I get sore,
'Cause I know this is no game
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