I liked how you put the rhyme scheme in an AA, way all the poem. 1 question: The second to last line "That life I knew is done," should knew be know? Anyways great writing.
I honestly have no suggestions to edit, I thought this was well written and provided a lot of detail to where I was watching a movie in my head. Great writing.
I really thought this was good, my normal poems I like are the short stanza 2-4lined, but this was very detailed. I hate to put my own out there but I think you'd enjoy my poem Your Expired Toy, dealing with the same situation. Anyways, perfect in my opinion 5/5
This was a really good poem, I'm not religious but you put what was in the Bible into really good poetry. Only suggestion and question is if in the first stanza second line if between all and He should be a comma? I have only reviewed very few poems but this was the best yet.
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