In my reviews, I like to be honest what I see and felt. What I think might improve the piece, but this is your writing and I respect the effort you have put into it.
Content: A short story of how the world’s land mass split into more continents. You have introduced some women and a family but not real evidence of any plot, or storyline.
Style: This story doesn’t flow from beginning to end. And in reading this to grasp your intent is very difficult.
Tips:
I’ll try to explain why in my humble opinion, I have marked up sections in red to highlight some ideas:
In early 70’s, the 25th of October 1973 to be exact, the landscapes of the whole entire earth, got cut into (why? Earthquake, meteor, the will of god?)pieces forming more than 7 continents worldwide.
Then and there (not needed), as continents began to isolate in distant areas, one remarkably enormous united country (should be a continent) floated apart. The Homo sapiens, who belonged to this environmental friendly Unitethomia, gained their currencies (worded poorly) with their highest efforts in the field of agriculture at an international scale. They were famous as “the mother of farming”. This would be obvious due to their very first footsteps (where did they come from?) being launched on top of the most exotic country with natural wonders highlighted (how are wonders highlighted like this?) all over the universe.
This 2,700,020 square kilometers lengthened (instead of lengthened, in area maybe?) country had beautiful crystal white sand, and aquatic under world (one word underworld) where diamond like dusks (dusks? word choice) are seen when sunlight hits the sea. The citizens named them as, "Shimmering maritime”. This one beach was elongated till the end of the country(“one beach ran the whole length of the country”), as this was the only country with merely one town in which deserved the name of the beloved kingdom. This habitation was not only popular from land background, but in women’s outlook too. (this whole section doesn’t make sense. Maybe.. This country had just one town, as such, the town and the country had the same name. It was known for its beautiful women.)
Those women were famous with the look of Arabian fair skin and hour glass shaped body. Miserably, they had a dark side of prostitution, in which they got proficient in the path of pleasing the international guests who visited for essential conferences. Their most gratifying meals include, beef, chicken, fish and various species of birds. Anything except for ham and pork as to them, its side effects were unhealthy in their religious observation. (You could word this differently to express the culture, this is confusing at best.) Their cultural skill includes the field of art in various directions such as, pottery art, poetry art, interior designing, graffiti and many more.
In this fairytale land, their lived a family, filled with poorness and misery due to the loss of their father at an early age. Their mother died when they were 18 and half years old. Elisha Emette and Emina Emette both came to the world on 5th of August 1989 at a midnight in a car. They came along in the middle of an accident where their own father died. Luckily, their mother Mrs. Emette survived, although had a disability of smelling ever since. (This doesn’t appear with any connections to the rest of the story. Does the disability mean that the mother smells bad? Or she cannot smell anything herself?)
Summary: I hope you take my suggestions and re-write this. As it is, it is very difficult to read. Keep it up, you have an idea here that could really end up with a nice story. Good writing!
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