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Review by cubert
Rated: E | (4.0)
This was really good, but now I am so depressed....
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Review of The Need To Want  
Review by cubert
Rated: E | (4.0)
I agree that this seems to need more, but it is great!
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Review of AN ODE TO WOMAN  
Review by cubert
Rated: E | (3.0)
I see your reviews so often on the page..I thought I'd read you. Here's a line by line run down, to start:(changes are capitalized)

4th are you Really sinister
5th though I respect THE word of God
6th This I truly don't believe (just rearranged)
7-8 great lines
12 As was his primitive tribe
21 just as A faulty foundation
23 so was status of woman

The first stanza was pretty good, but it was the only one that didn't rhyme, so it didn't fit right. Generally speaking, this is a good piece of work. If the words were rearranged and a few of them replaced, it would be a Great piece of work. It has all the important parts already, just needs retooling. It doesn't flow. As far as the subject matter...groovy. Nice to see a man ponder the place of woman in a positive way. I appreciate it. I would love to see this again after an edit, and would be glad to help with the rhythym. I see a lot of promise, and it is driving me to read more of your work. These are just my personal feelings, though, it's yours, and no one else may feel that way, so do what makes you happy. I enjoyed it, regardless.
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Review of Just Grass  
Review by cubert
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was divine reading. I really like the construction. I have only one suggestion:

The sky above, a patchwork quilt
Of scrambled clouds the sun plays in
Where fences roam what Season's spilt
And mornings over mountains, chin

If you change just two words, the flow seems to be better:

The sky above, a patchwork quilt
Of scrambled clouds the sun plays on
Where fences roam what Season's spilt
And mornings over mountains dawn.


Just a personal preference though..I didn't write it! And regardless, it is a truly lovely poem. I'm definetly adding you to my authors page, so I can see more of your work!
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Review of As Icarus Flew  
Review by cubert
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I don't even have words...this is on another level from what I have been reading all night. What do you do for a living? English professor? *g* I am reminded of greek literature. Very nice. Great imagery.
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Review by cubert
Rated: E | (4.5)
This one just gets better as it goes.
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Review of sleepless  
Review by cubert
Rated: E | (4.5)
oh wow..what else could I say? fantastic.
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Review of he walks  
Review by cubert
Rated: E | (4.0)
I feel overzealous when I rate things highly, because of standard and all, but i really, really liked this poem. I want to see more! And please, come see mine. i am a newbie too, and my handle is chenoa. Loved it!
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