Cyndi's (cyndihaltom02) Reviews

Cyndi

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#4606035

Review of Yaktrax [#21 Lavinia]

Review by Cyndi

Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

I think you did a good job on this one, it's hard to write prose without rhyme and I think you accomplished your objective quite well. I especially liked "blanket of dreams" and "dimples of tracks in the fresh snow". This was a well versed idea that is difficult to accomplish. One suggestion, you might consider using more punctuation for definition of your emotions and what you are wanting the reader to experience. Otherwise, good job!

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#4533136

Review of Finding the Light

Review by Cyndi

Rated: E

| (3.0)

I love this, I laughed and laughed, dust mite indeed!

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#4455768

Review of Beware, They're Coming This Way

Review by Cyndi

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Fantastic! You relayed the excitement of the moment perfectly. I thought it would be a swarm of bees but the biting black flies was a great twist. Thanks for a wonderful story with perfect visual stimulation.

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#4455767

Review of Brave

Review by Cyndi

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I love this, you captured exactly how I felt when I was in my first year of HS. I'd almost forgotten how frightened I was, a new place, new kids, new teachers and a different way of learning. It was all so scary. You did a great job, thanks!

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#4455764

Review of Crystal Clear

Review by Cyndi

Rated: E

| (4.0)

I thoroughly enjoyed this poem, it's alive with description and brings that to the reader.

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#4438189

Review of The Haunted Refrigerator

Review by Cyndi

Rated: 13+

| (3.0)

Your story has definite potential, I'd love to read more. Keep up the good work.

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#4383228

Review of Passing of Summer

Review by Cyndi

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Interesting read. I too have a great fondness for summer and miss it the day before summer ends. I like the way you led us right into Fall and how many times we welcome the coolness. I too am a woodworker, I love the feel and texture of it in my hands. Thank you and have a really great Winter. I look forward to summer already.

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#4383225

Review of The Frozen Start

Review by Cyndi

Rated: E

| (1.5)

The intent is there but I think you need to re-read your story because there is a lot of grammar problems and it makes your story hard to read. There is potential, however, so give it a second try and see what you are able to fix. I'd love to read the rewrite.

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#4383224

Review of The Wall She Built

Review by Cyndi

Rated: E

| (2.5)

I like your story but I question this comment,

"The ground littered with empty pringle packets, half-eaten takeaways and beer bottles".

How did you see these things at night and only saw the black silhouettes of drunken men. It doesn't seem to work in my head but perhaps I'm look at it wrong. Anyway, good beginning, hope you finish.