Wow. So very relatable. I am, at the moment, going through that ( except the last part so far) and your words stirred my soul. Very sad. very nice. Thank you for sharing.
chuck
Hi. I enjoyed reading your poem. I'm glad you put it to paper and out of your head to share. To be honest I expected the writer to be older. you seem to have a flair for transposing complicated matters into simplification. I envy you that. Good luck on your writing career. I will be on the look out for your name at Amazon etal.
Hi, Interesting perspective. Well written. Have you tired experimenting with changing the format? Maybe break the lines and make it a "poem" format? No, i don't really know what I'm talking about, but it seems like it is a powerful piece that could really have more impact if broken in other places.
chuck
Hi,
I just finished reading your poem and I find it to be very powerful. The emotions are raw, yet refined and evoke empathy, not sympathy. I am not very experienced in writing and far from any kind of expert but I will try to give you my honest thoughts.
As I stated , the work carried very strong emotions and succeeds in presenting them. I enjoyed it over-all but I did find it a bit awkward in a couple of places. As if you substituted form for the rhyme. Otherwise I enjoyed it very much and learned a thing or two as well. Thank you for sharing such personal
feelings.
Best regards,
chuck
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