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Review by d.r.a.g.o.n
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very glad to see it back and that chapter was fantastic. This story is wonderful because of the characterization and slow burn and realistic build up of the swapping and when other stories would just jump straight for the "final swap" delivery you once again opted for a twist that made total sense here.

Chris opened his heart and took the leap of faith, but Debra's quick reasoning and old ghosts in her mind missinterpreted it. Pure and realistic drama, especially involving teenagers. Great writing. I am glad that Debra got the right kind of parental advice in Cynthia that allowed her to realize her mistakes and get back on track.


That's Debra, always thinking fast and eventually making mistakes, but having the will to bounce back and try to fix them.

Chris, however, had a different experience. Now he is the one who have been hurt at the worst possible moment and even though Debra's parents are caring and lovely, they are not up to Cynthia's level of parenting and still don't know how to handle Debra and 'Debra's feelings in situations like this.

It will be really interesting to see how the couple will overcome this challenge. It was their most serious fight so far and a make or break moment regarding their future together and the swap, but looking at how far you developed them, they do have the right tools to overcome this crisis.

Thanks for writing.
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Review by d.r.a.g.o.n
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Superb writing as always (and I can't believe only now I realized that I could be sending public reviews all this time... duh..).

I liked how you wrote Sheila here as she is also flawled and not an onipotent chessmaster, so this journey can take interesting turns. I kinda wished that she would have grabed some piece of Joel's clothes to experiment with the medallion (and maybe re-act that dream that Kyle had) or somehow involve him in the scheme latter. After all, Sheila - aware of it or not - is not only interested in assuming Kyle's life, but is thrilled to see him assume her life too. It would be nice to see if after the swap she will still keep this hidden interest/jealousy/vouyer/cuck desires about Kyle in her body. Thanks for writing.
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