This chapter was very gripping.Have you written more chapters for this story? as I would like to find out more about the character progressions and overall plot.
My favourite scene was when faldashir shot and killed the two people after Branston. I also liked the part where one of the guys teleported.
Great use of imagery and build up of anticipation. I want to learn more about why Branston has those tatoos on his hands.
Keep up the good work :)
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