It is an overall well written story. I only went down a few paths, and as I do not have any special account, I didn't go too far along any. But from what I saw, the style of writing is very consistent, and never too drawn out. My only possible criticism is that the character is really given no personality, but that can also be a good thing soemtiems too
So the story overall is very good. The story line between the first and second parts was a little confusing, as in the connection between the two, but other than that it was very good. A second criticism actually, would be a sort of uneven pacing. For stories of this type, as they are so short, pace of events (not including Time skips) should stay consistent.
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