I loved the depth and meaning of this poem. I don't like that many mushy love poems, but I really liked this one. It was well written, had good word choices, and flowed well. It was truly lovely, and I hope you keep writing. You have a lot of potential and talent. I hope you are successful in your writing!
I liked the simplicity of the poem and the word choice you used. They weren't too fancy or too difficult.
"I pray for forgiveness and hope to atone for my cruel, misguided, violent, ambitions."
I liked that line because of the words, although you don't need a comma after violent and need an and after misguided. But it was very well written! Good job!
I liked the poem because it's short, sweet, simple, and to the point. There aren't careless words thrown in there with no meaning, or pretty lies that seem fluffy. It has a simple meaning that is easily seen in the poem. It was great, but next time check for grammar errors.
It's a dark and depressing poem, but I really liked it. It has great detail and I could understand it without needing to go to a thesaurus every two seconds.
"Living in a virtual world
True reality unknown"
I really liked those two lines because of what they mean. Overall it was great, but maybe some punctuation throughout the line would be better to help the reader understand where the lines end.
This is kinda depressing, but in a good way. It uses great imagery and detail and it's a clear poem. The word choices were simple, but it kinda fits with the poem. I really enjoyed reading it. Yeah, I don't really know what else to say except it was great.
This is a great poem! I loved the imagery and how you conveyed your feelings very clearly in this poem. You didn't make us look for a deeper meaning, or have confusing words. It's also a general poem, so somebody could recite this poem to someone they love. It's well written and refreshing to read. Good job!
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