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Review of Game Models  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This would have been a game I would have played in my younger days. I would have jumped at the chance. Oh how much better and easier and more exciting this game would have made my life. Your discription alone made me want to jump in right now and start participating.

When I got to the end of your story I was still ready for more. I didn't want it to end. I was ready to learn so much more about this game.

I am not a literature pro but, I have to give you five stars for this piece. It was fabulous. I enjoyed it very much.


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Review of The Diagnosis  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Very good story. The title was perfect. This really wasn't my type of story but once I got started reading I couldn't stop. It held my attention from beginning to end.

There did not appear to be any mistakes as far as spelling or punctuation. The whole story was easy to read and easy to understand.

The structure of your story was creative and very well put together.

Your characters were all unique in their own way.

A captivating story through and through. I look forward to reading much more of your stuff.

Great piece
Ricky
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this is the first time I have taken the chance to read some of your writing. I am glad I dropped by. This is a wonderful poem. I love trees and the beauty they produce. You worded this poem beautifully.

Trees have come in handy for so many uses from providing a place for a tree house to being a good spot to make out with your girl. My brothers and I loved to climb them. They also make a good place to put a swing. Trees are such a beautiful addition to the beauty of the earth.

I enjoyed your poem very much and look forward to reading more.

Dartagnan
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent piece and well written. Our journey all lead down a different path and I have always been one of the lucky ones. I have lived a full happy life. Even though I am a poor man my wealth is my family.

Each and every one of us has to find our own path to happiness and so many are unlucky and never find theirs.

I have myself been truly blessed.
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Review of Pants on Fire  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I have always thought that Peurto Rico should have been given its statehood. If it's going to be US territory, it might as well be a state.

That's just me!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am not an expert in the field of literature. I love to read, write, and review poetry and short stories. I will give your work my honest opinion. That being said;

This style of poetry can sometimes be a little tough to write. Coming up with that many words that rhyme.

First off, you get the attention of the sports fan with your title. That was an eye catcher. Catching the reader and reeling them in is the job of the title.

Secondly. The rhythm was very good. I was able to read the poem with no difficulty and it had a nice flow.

Thirdly The form is one not often seen. Although I like this form and use it myself, people tend to shy away from it.

Fourth. All the words rhymed very well. You wasn’t having to reach out for words that didn’t fit.
It was an easy read.

Fifth. All the lines stayed at the same count making the poem a very well written piece.

Overall View

It was a fun piece of work to read. The writer can be proud of his or her work. It was a pleasure reviewing this piece and I look forward to others in the future.


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Review by Dartagnan Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Before I called it a night I wanted to return the favor you had so graciously did for me. I did not know what to expect. I came across a picture of a very lovely lady and a poem called I Thought Of Someone Today.

This was a very beautiful piece of writing. I don't feel worthy to be reviewed by such a writer as yourself. Your poetry is art. A painting with words.

You had been so kind as to review my story, I had to come and visit and find out who Teresa really was by her own words. Your writing is an inspiration.

My oldest daughters husband is in the military and has already done two tours. He is getting close to being able to retire from the army. He is also a Police Officer. They have three kids.

My younger daughters husband is a certified chef but manages an AT&T store. They have four kids.

My son works at an AT&T store and raising his little girl by himself because the mother didn't want any part of my son's life. He has met someone that is very special and she loves both of them very much and is always buying his little girl clothes.

Sorry to be rambling on. I love my kids very much. My wife and I have really been blessed. My wife has MS and draws disability. She has a very hard time sometimes. She has bad days and then she has really bad days.

I hope everything goes well for you and you and your son will be in our thoughts and prayers.
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Review of Circular Logic  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I am not an expert in the field of literature. I love to read write and review poetry and short stories. That being said:

HuntersMoon, I think this is the first of your stories I have had the privilege of reviewing.

Your writing is very impressive. Like I said I am no expert but this, in my opinion, was very good.

I don’t feel qualified enough to review someone with such talent. You put me to shame.

Your characters were brought to life with such extraordinary detail. Rolf in his situation on another planet. Trying to elude capture by the Aliens who if they find him, well I’ll wait for the writer to finish that one.

The aliens seem to be an interesting creature. With their height and interesting clothing. They seem to be easy to take out also.

Your setting was very good. You can’t miss with another planet as your setting. It seems that this planet is pretty close in features as earth.

I think the plot is self-explanatory. To explore a new planet and to survive while doing so.

Well, I like it. Very good story.


Dartagnan



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Review of The Sower  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am not an expert in the field of literature. I love to read write and review poetry and short stories. That being said:

God has a plan for all of us. His plan for us started long before we were even born. It is up to us to nurture and cultivate that plan and grow as christians as he would have us do.

God puts us here with a 50/50 proposition. We all have certain talents and capabilities and it’s up to each of us to use those talents and capabilities the best way we can. That is our gift back to God.

God sent his son to pay the ultimate price for our sins so that we could have everlasting life.

For God so loved the world, you and I, that he gave his only begotten son, Jesus Christ, that whosoever believeth in him shall not perish but have everlasting life.

That was quite a sacrifice by God. He gave his only son to die on a cross for our sins so that if we believed in him we could live forever in heaven.

Gods love for us is incredible.

So many people go through life never knowing what it’s like to walk with God. Some people refuse to accept him.

Trust in the Lord thy God for he is the Alpha and Omega. The beginning and the end.

Dartagnan



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Review by Dartagnan Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I am not an expert in the field of literature. I love to read, write, and review poetry and short stories. With that being said:

This is not my type of story but, I went on and gave it a chance. I’ve got to say I was impressed with your writing skills. Very impressive. I wish I could write like this.

You did an excellent job bringing the characters to life.

The story line is very good. Putting together a situation like this one is pretty cool. You did a very good job.

If there were any mistakes in spelling or punctuation they were not noticed.

I know I don’t read this kind of stuff but if you send me what ever you add I would be glad to review it for you if you like. I am hooked.

When you can hook a reader to where they can’t stop, you have done a good job.

Not only did I get hooked, I wanted more. I didn’t want to stop.

The story had a nice flow. The reader didn’t have to go back any.

I would be very surprised if anyone suggested any changes.

In my unprofessional opinion, I thought this was a very good story. And a very good piece of work.

Bravo to the writer.

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Review by Dartagnan Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I thank you so very much for the Trinkets. They were all very well made. I really liked the Princess one. That was very special.

I have just started collecting and I'm hoping to get a good collection started from around the world. You have given me a step in the right direction.

I hope you will create some more of these fascinating trinkets again soon.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I am no expert in the field of literature by no means. I love to read, write, and review poetry. I will give you the best review I can. So with that being said:

First Off: I like the title. I think it says a lot for the piece you have written. Parents today really don’t pay enough attention to their kids. It’s a shame. That’s why so many end up in trouble or dead.

Secondly: The imagery is very good. This piece lets the reader see so well what the writer is trying to get across to them. The reader has a chance to journey into the thoughts of the writer.

Thirdly: The rhyming was very good. It really set off this piece very well. Rhyming is not easy in these types of poems. You pulled it off very well.

Fourth: I saw nothing wrong with the rhythm and flow of this piece. There is nothing here that should disrupt the flow of this poem what-so-ever. I was able to read straight through without any difficulties.

Fifth: The structure and form were very good. I saw no errors in spelling or punctuation. It was very well put together and sent a clear message.

Sixth: The theme of this piece sends out a message that needs to be addressed so badly. Young people are getting into trouble more and more every day. Where are the parents. The parents need to be taking more responsibility. They need to be more involved with their kids now than ever before.

Seventh: I liked this poem for the main reason that it addresses a big problem with the young people today. Parents turn their backs and don’t face up to the problems associated with their own kids. I will never know why. A lot of the youth today raise themselves because their parents are to busy with their own lives to be bothered with their kids.

Sorry but you opened the door and let me in so I had to vent a little.

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Review of Creatures  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
First Off: I am not an expert in the field of literature. I love to read, write, and review poetry. With that being said I will give you the best and most honest review I can.

I found your poem to be wonderfully written. The language was very good. Although, it's hard to find pleasantries in anything about suicide I thought it was very good. I must say you do have a way with words.

The imagery was really good. When the reader can actually see in his mind what he is reading, the writer has done their job well.

The rhyming was very good. It all seemed to fit together nicely. All the words worked together.

The rhythm and flow of the poem were great. It flowed along nicely for the reader. There was no having to go back and reread.

As for the theme! I am usually not one for reading this kind of poetry but I am glad I read this one. It was very good. I enjoyed it very much.

Not many poems of this nature thrill me but, I must say this one got my full attention. It was a very good piece and I hope you will send more poetry my way to review.

Thank you for this honor.


Dartagnan
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Review of Those Eyes....  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am, by no means, an expert in the field of literature. I love to read, write, and review poetry and short stories. With that being said:

Very nice piece. My favorite line is:
Though I love those eyes and see the love in them reflected back.

If anyone suggests any changes it would surprise me.

Good imagery and nice flow.

I hope this review encourages the writer and not discourages.

Dartagnan
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Review of Which Witch?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am, by no means, an expert in the field of literature. I love to read, write, and review poetry and short stories. With that being said:

This is a wonderful children piece. I will have to read it to my grand children.

It's a fun piece to read with lots of imagery that creates a magical world for the child.

It has all the elements for a good story and has a wonderful flow to it.

I don't see anything in this piece that I would change.

It's the type of story you wouldn't mind reading to your child over and over.
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Review of I Melt Sugar  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I can't tell you how close you came to my life in this poem. You hit so close to home. I am the calm and my wife is the storm and together we balanced out. I brought out the smiles and laughter when she thought all was lost.

The imagery was so easy to see. So many things came to light. So amazing. I don't think there is one poem I have read so far that has hit so close to home.

Bravo, my friend.
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Review of Eight  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A unique piece indeed. This is different than what I usually read. It really stands out from other poems.

The imagery took a minute to grasp. Afterward, it was clear to see what the meaning was behind your words.

I think if anything is to be changed it should be at the discretion of the writer. I say leave it like it is.
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Review of Echo Verse  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This style of poetry is new to me. Still, the piece was very good. I really enjoyed it.

The imagery brought out the writers thoughts for the reader to walk through. A picture painted with words.

The rhythm and the flow of this piece were very good. I would be very surprised if anyone suggested any changes.
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Review of Ugly Like Rain  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Rain is Gods way of giving the earth a bath.

Good poem. The imagery was clear and allowed the reader to see into the thoughts of the writer.

The rhythm and flow were good. There seemed to be no errors in grammar.

I can't point out anything i would change.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was a tough one to read. I am finding it hard to come up with the words. It was written so very well that you want to hate it. I hope you can understand what I mean.

The construction of this piece was so great. You brought to life the horrors of this little girls nightmares.
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Review of Halos  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a very lovely poem. The rhyming was consistent and easy to read. The rhythm and flow were perfect.

I can't see anyone wanting to change anything about this beautiful piece of writing.

The imagery was fantastic. It brought the reader along for a wonderful ride into the thoughts of the writer.
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Review of Silence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
An enjoyable piece to read. The imagery was very good. I could see into the thoughts of the writer. You actually had me feeling I was there.

It had a style I am not quite used to but, did not take away from the poem at all.

If there be any changes at all it will be at the writer's discretion. I like it the way it is.
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Review of Tequila Courage  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Great piece. This was intoxicating. LOL

Your writing has a wildness about it that makes it exciting. It's a pleasure to read. A poem is great when it gets the reader's attention and yours does just that.

I am already looking forward to your next piece.
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Review of You Know Me Well  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was a beautiful piece. You make a man wish he was yours. The imagery was that great. The language of this poem was awesome. I know you had me wishing I was in your arms.

I know, I'm just an old coot who should be ashamed. But I'm not.

Don't change a thing.

Love it.
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Review of Goodbye  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Very enjoyable poem.

Very well put together and had a very nice flow.

I would be surprised if anyone suggested any changes be made. Sometimes the first draft is good enough.

It had good rhythm and a nice flow.

It showed lots of imagery.

Look forward to reading more of your writing.
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