Darth-Slayer's (darth-slayer19) Reviews

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#4497700

Review of Zimbabwe Rain

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

First off I have to say AMAZING TITLE! It hooked my attention right away! You paint a very clear picture of the land and weather. It gave me chills. There is a clear rhythm to this poem. There is a clear need for the rains to come again. Great Job!

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#4497699

Review of I'll be your puppet.

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Amazing imagery! I have noticed a great deal or truth and emotion in your work. Its dark at times but it is clear the speaker is torn about who they want to be. There is Clear imagery in this piece. the line "like a broken Marionette" I am wondering are you talking to another person in paragraph #5 or is this self reflection because the ""S make it a little difficult to tell the difference. But over all a well written prose.

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#4497538

Review of The Way You Loved Me Then

Review by Darth-Slayer

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Dear Lil,

Wow! What a breathtaking piece of work! There are so much emotion behind this piece! There is wishing to go back to the past AND for a better future; there is remnants of happiness; Pain of what has changed; the fear of uncertainty of moving on. Honestly an amazing poem! Great Work!!!

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#4497537

Review of You will always be in my Heart

Review by Darth-Slayer

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A few grammar errors but overall a beautiful and heartfelt poem that speaks truth.

suggestion:

Change "Life's" to "Lives"

Change "Become" to "Come"

Get rid of the 2 commas in line 8

add comma to "but one thing is clear" EX: "But one thing is clear, you will always be in my heart."

apart from that this was a beautiful poem! Very romantic! Excellent writing! KEEP IT UP!

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#4497536

Review of Forests of Virtue

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Every once in a while you come across a short story like this and find its simplicity very refreshing. I love this story. The innocence between William and Cu was especially nice! Excellent job on this. It is a gem!

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#4497530

Review of KR-435

Review by Darth-Slayer

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

I LOVE THESE KINDS OF STORIES!This story reminded me of my own Story "Star Wars: Shadows of Scarif" part 2. I love when an enemy becomes an Asset. Something I love about this story is that you don't always know what Stormtroopers are thinking and to have a stormtrooper's feelings shown so clearly is amazing. great Job!!!

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#4497529

Review of Dark Apprentice Chronicles-pt1

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Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

You captured Anakin and Yoda Very well. The story was believable, and made me feel like this story fit into the Star Wars Canon. Well done! I would love to see what else happens to Ciara after this story!

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#4497528

Review of Star Wars: Rebellion (Chapter 1)

Review by Darth-Slayer

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

I love the concept of this story. It is a fresh spin on literally bringing the Star Wars Universe to our world! The Story was very descriptive and truly gave an idea of what would happen if the Imperial Navy attacked Earth. WELL WRITTEN! KEEP WRITING!