Hello! I found A Secret Worth Keeping wonderful. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.
✔️ Overall Impression: I loved it. It kept me constantly wondering about the secret and all the small things like the pills. I felt like I was really in the story or watching a TV show with the way you had the, speak. It reminded me of a show called Riverdale.
✔️ Plot: Your plot is kept my attention the entire time. Tommy, Ruby, and Liam have a secret. I believe it is that Tommy and Liam want to romantically run away together. Tommy's father is a olden style bible (all damned to hell) type of man. If he found out his son was planning to run away with Liam, he would probably kill him. So, liam fakes his death and ruby knows about the plan. I believe her tears are for her brother and Liam leaving. Then we fast forward into the future where Tommy and Ruby who is pregnant show up to see their mom. She's alone, her husband dead. Tommy has no desire to visit the grave and still hates his father. Ruby is pregnant. I might be completely wrong about the plot becuase she takes flowers to where he supposedly died. So maybe I'm wrong... I'll have to read it through again. Tommy gets ready to tell his mom the secret that I think is that he's gay.
✔️ Style and Voice: old southern country folks. I absolutely loved the writing style and voices. I could really hear them talking in my mind and them having accents really brought them to life.
✔️ Scene/Setting: A old farm home that the mother keeps clean, making sure her floors are free of dirt. I loved how you did the flashback as well.
✔️ Characters: You did amazingly with the characters. The father is easy to hate. The mother is easy to get familiar with and tommy and Ruby's relationship is apparent. Even Liam whom I didn't meet, I felt like I did.
✔️ Grammar and Mechanics: I ran your work through Grammarly. It is well done. Becuase of your use of slang and southern drawl, all your words are properly done.
✔️ Suggestions: You did a great job! You kept me wanting more but also questioning so much. I'm still wondering if I know the secret and what the pills were. It really kept me wanting more. The only thing I could suggest is that you write more becuase I want to know what he tells his mom, but the best part of your story is the fact that I am wondering so it is perfect just the way it is!
Thank you for sharing your story with me! I really really enjoyed it. If you have anymore I could take a look at, please send theme my way! Write On!
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