Hmm nice beginning, I never thought much of Sea Dragons, and the colors of frequencies? Very interesting. I almost could see like she did. Keep it up! Nice touches, and no typos I could find. Good start. is there going to be more?
:D Oh that was rich, (pun intended) I enjoyed it lots. Someone finally get her due deserts. and the male lead has a new lady friend with amazing powers. Sweet! Are you planning on expanding this?.
HO HO HO!!! I never thought anyone or anything could find something good to say about an oil spill! this was rich! what else do these visitors crave? Junk plastic? Used plutonium? Just being nosy. Keep it up! Loved it!
Oh I loved this! and I'm trying to write a story line with vamps,, plus were folk in it! using the Power for good! very creative and no misspellings (don't you love spell check?) My favorite one so far! :D
Where Wolf! :D I almost wish I'd thought of that! And elemental particles do act somewhat like this! I could not find any mistakes, and got quite a chuckle out of it. the idea of gods in a Divine room? maybe they are interior decorators? (sorry, couldn't resist) and gods as he/she is also quite nice, Altogether quite refreshing - although I still say - "Where wolf!" :)
Hmm. bittersweet tale of a family of sorts. A heartbroken little girl, and a father who was once a baker. How did he become a vampire? Will Nina ever grow old enough to date? I think you could flesh this out a bit more. I'm not usually into female heartbreak tales - or vamps - but since writing about such things have sort of got "bit". (sorry - pun bug bit.) Anyway - a nice tidy tale, with a surprise ending. By the way - what happened to Mom? Just a few things to clear up. Good start though.
this is a nice - though sad, little tale. I'd never thought of things from the cars viewpoint though I might as well - there are so many to choose from. a heroic car. who'd have thought of it? i suppose in the "next in-car-nation (sorry couldn't help it) he comes back as another auto, or something. Pedigree indeed. I enjoyed it. good tale.
This is a nice start! it only comes out at night. then during the daytime a "normal" housewife (I never liked that term, a woman marries a man, not a house). where was i? Oh yes, the night prowling - idea stealing vamp. Very good and a cool idea.
I think I'll steal er - borrow - these. I can relate especially to 3, 9 & 17. Actually did that (17) and 1 week later just had to have it! It had been sitting in the yard for a year & 1/2 ! I can tell someone likes sci-fi.
I think almost everyone has seen those "faerie circles" at one time or another, but while this is a nice little poem i really think you should expand. (And help me keep my own "faeries' quiet, they like poetry too).
Why is someone asking if they're poisonous?
I think you should tell'us
Perhaps if nibbled not eaten entire
One could find oneself beside the faerie fire.
Please expand! :)
This chapter is a classic beginning for not only sci-fi but fantasy, as well as some others. "the Reluctant Hero" I'd call it. The premise is familiar to me too - child of privilege living in opposition to power. A very nice start to a classic tale, I hope it continues with the usual twists, turns, and not a few tricks. As this is my 1st review, I'm not sure how to rate it. I've read a LOT of sci-fi & fantasy and still enjoy them both. It will be nice to see how this turns out. there were no obvious mistakes in spelling, or grammar that I could see either. author must have done some work on it before submission. That's always a plus. i like it so far. 4 stars.
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