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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this, you truly capture the feeling. the uttermost sorrow you can only get after being hurt by the one you think loved you back,
I cannot see any problem with this, but it could be longer. I'm not saying, "You must make it longer." but I feel that with this poem you could expand on it so much more, such as continuing on how the love felt (Other than just explaining it should have been a fairy tail) and maybe how this love was crushed.

I love the line, "Stuck in the past - Can’t see through the static in my looking glass..." I read it and was shocked in all honesty how you put these things together that to me, seam disconnected and yet the end result is an amazing line.

Of course this is just my simple opinion. All in all this a sad yet beautiful piece of writing. Keep up the good work. ~A-O
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