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15 Public Reviews Given
15 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I bring kindness followed up with brutally honest reviews of everything. I won't sugarcoat your stuff, but I will give credit when credit is due.
I'm good at...
Finding a grammatical mishap or finding if something is boring for the reader
Favorite Genres
Romance, animal, crime and horror
Least Favorite Genres
Sci-fi and educational
Favorite Item Types
Short stories, lyrics.
Least Favorite Item Types
Poetry.
I will not review...
Any XGC, GC, 18+ or NPL.
Public Reviews
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow.. Is there a part 2? No, like really, this is possibly one of the best stories I've read. I was just a little bit confused, when the orb was under his seat, more so. I do think it's a good read, but I do think you can add a little bit more explaining words, instead of

"I guess there's no reason to stay," Phillip said.

You say;

"I guess there's no reason to stay," Phillip tried to shrug it off

You can easily increase your word count and add more descriptive wording.
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Review of Precision  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I am drainfall, and I will be reviewing your fiction story, "Presession"

I love this! Although, if you used a bit more descriptive words, such as, "Her eyes, glancing at max, were shaped in a way to make her appearance more observant and sharp" instead of "Her eyes, sharp and observant"


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Review of The Spirit Owl  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Woah! A turn I wasn't expecting! I LOVED this, I was able to learn about Lakota culture and be entertained! I do think, if this was a bit shorter, it would be a bit better. I do think you could be a bit more descriptive in the end part, but overall, this was amazing!


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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello, I am drainfall, I will be reviewing your nonfiction story, "In the Arms of a Pet"

I loved this, made me feel the feelings Rose was feeling. Although, I was a bit bored, I think, if this was shorter,it may be better. I do think how you worded everything was extremely clever


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Review of The Chair  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I am drainfall, and I will be reviewing your short story, 'The Chair'

Woah... This story is so captivating. I do think it was a bit harder to read with all the longer words. As well as adding a bit of dialogue, maybe Oswald trying to go outside to explain to people that the answer is to sit at a wall.
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Review of They Watch.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh, my god. This is the best story I have ever read. I see absolutely no problem. Seriously, I don't say that often and this was better than mine! I. love. This. So. Much!


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Review of First Days  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It was so good, like, honestly. Coming from a 10-year-old to 15-year-old, this was better than mine! I LOVED the part where you used what your grandpa said. I do think the note after the story was a bit long. But some of the paragraphs were a bit longer than others. Five stars and a round of applause from drainfall.


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Review of Neighbourhood  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (1.5)
I'm drainfall; I will be reviewing your short story, Neighbourhood.

I loved this story. I just got confused; I couldn't really get a grasp on who lived there first, James and Sarah or Sam and Margery. I think it would be better if you went into more detail, like, the names of the children.


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Review of Randel  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (1.0)
I really didn't find this interesting, I do see how this is trying to be made, but it isn't being made in the best, most explanatory text. It confused me, I didn't understand who's who, who's speaking, and who said what! I think if executed better, it would be good.


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Rated: ASR | (1.5)
Amazing plot twists, and this made me laugh! Although this wasn't made with the best quality, I think it could of explained a bit more than it did. It was really good, but it could of been better. I didn't know where this man was, and finally I didn't know how he got there.


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Review of Dad in Charge  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (2.5)
It's cute! Except that, the last part was a bit long, It was different than the rest. It explained what he did, but didn't explain who, what, and how. I love the concept, but, in total honesty, the last part made it boring. Another thing was I got confused when the dad talked about the mother.


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