Sounds really cool already! You did a really good job. The words run well together, and the way you write it makes it really seem like one of the actual Warrior books.
I really don't have anything else to say until the next installments come out. There's nothing bad about it that I can see, except when Stiffpaw says:
"There's a large clump of heather nectar just inside ShadowClan territory. I'm allowed to go grab some but you're not. So...I guess I'll just bring you some to take back, too?"
There's nothing bad about the quote itself, but about what followed.
He phrased it as a question so -> I <- thought about an answer.
But it's not really a big problem. As I said before, you did an amazing job :)
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