This is good... I found myself engrossed in it... And the story really did read easily. Some of your adjectives blurred the imagery to me. The part about her dress for some reason, lost me. I saw a dirty, dingy dress. Which I know you were trying to convey that but, it was just too much. Too many adjectives in that description. And "must" should be "musk".
Keep on keepin on...
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