I like the plot, it has enough interest for a good mystery. I don't understand why some words are capitalized and italicized. For example "Time Capsule." should not be capitalized. Also, the characters, what do they look like, how do they talk and so on. Make me feel and smell the stale books in the storage room. Give me something tangible not just words on a page but put me in the library. I think you have a great idea and I hope you continue to develop the story. I am looking forward to what happens.
You have a great start to a story. you did a good job keeping me interested. there are a lot of grammatical errors and the characters are lacking any description, I have no idea what they look like. Also, the character's names are too closely related Heena looks like a misspelling of Hana and Meena looks like a misspelling of Heena, too confusing.
Fill in the blanks and clean up the sentences and you will have a great story.
As a fellow observer of life, there is a lot of truth in your words and it seems you are writing from personal experience. It's nice to see someone who thinks that all opinions are just that, opinions. everyone is entitled to an opinion but that doesn't mean it should be heard. Now for the critical side, this seems to be one-sided. like opinions, there are two sides to an argument.
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