Title Teaser and Tidbits
Hiya
Taylor 
! I came across your poem while searching for newbies to read and was drawn in by the title of your piece, since summer is just around the corner.
I think that your teaser (item description) could use a little spicing up. I understand that you might want to inform people that this is your first poem, but it doesn't necessarily make me want to further investigate your item. A short description about why you chose the topic to write about, or why it is important to you would be more suited to the piece. You can always mention the first poem thing inside the item at the very bottom in fine print if you still feel the need to.
The only other thing in this section that I wanted to point out is your choice for the genre. Teen and experience fit the profile, but the "educational" threw me off because I didn't sense it in the poem. How about something along the lines of "inspirational" or "nature" instead?
Item rating (E) is accurate
Flow Diction and Other Structures
Here, I had a number of relatively minor problems while reading. I couldn't really sense the direction that you wanted to go with creating a flow to the poem. The following are spots where I got tripped up the most:
In the first stanza where you write
I bend down as I/ reach my hand to makes the motions that the speaker is doing seem choppy. To make this portion more fluid you might consider joining the phrases in a way like “I bend down and /reach my hand”.
Similarly, the repetition of “feel” and “feeling” that occurs in line four seems a little redundant. Here you might try something like “to feel the soft heat” therefore eliminating the double usage.
In the second stanza, I found the line breaks inconsistent with how you began writing the poem and how you ended the poem. This is especially true of the fourth line where the line extends really far out, in a way that is not just unpleasant to the eye. It
sounds bad too. I would suggest playing around with either (a) shortening or getting rid of it, or (b) dividing it up between more lines.
In addition to not really grasping a definite flow in the poem, I found myself getting a little agitated with the constant use of “I” and “me” (they occur 16 times total in the poem). This creates a forced sound over the course of the poem, and although I am definitely NOT saying to get rid of all of them, I do think the poem would sound better if you could combine some of the phrases in more unique ways. In this way, it won’t sound as though there are a bunch of simple sentences strung together, and it gives a little flair to the ideas you are trying to convey.
As far as little details and small word choices go, I think that there are some that could use replacing. For example, where you use the word blue, there are a hundred different shades that could come to mind. Is it indigo, sky blue, blue-green, navy blue, or a deep sparkling blue? I also feel the same where you write about the old waves "going away". It sounds like they are going on a vacation. So instead, why not write that they are receding, or breaking?
Otherwise, I think you did a really neat job of dividing your ideas between the stanzas and across the poem as a whole. It begins with an action by the speaker, moves on to inner thoughts and some creative symbolism, and then makes a full loop to where the reader once again sees the actions of the speaker as they stir from their quite reverie. Good work!
Emotion and Imagery
I like the imagery you are integrating into these ideas a lot. The beach scene is an accurate one to include in an account of summer as well as it’s symbolism with the coming and breaking of old memories with the waves. It is lightly painted with both emotion and imagery. Particularly, I liked the lines "
new memories for a/new summer". Very cute!
Technical Stuffs
These were a small number of spelling mistakes that should be attended to when you get the chance:
Stanza: 2 Line: 2 DISSPEAR should be
disappear
Stanza: 2 Line: 4 TELING should be
telling
Stanza: 3 Line: 1 FLOWNING should be
flowing
Final Thoughts
You have a good poem here; it just isn’t quite finished yet. Once you conclude organizing the flow and technical stuff, you will even have a great one. Please don’t hesitate to email me after making your edits if you are interested in me rating and reviewing your item again. Keep up the great work and write on!
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I felt like the "
and the second time through the poem was hilarious and I enjoyed it a lot! 
). The changing over from light with the mentioning of sun and elements , to graying with the words weathered and grainy skin, to even darker with the descriptions of the forest (which I perceived as thick and jungle-like) as well as the line about the sinister child. The speaker goes on to lighten the tone shade by shade until the poem ends on the wonderfully high note of “She is beautiful” 
In addition to the above quote, I would also like to offer you these additional compliments and suggestions on your work. 
The level of detail and description creates a great deal of mental pictures without being overwhelming or over-exaggerated. I think you have a pretty good balance with the imagery. I am especially fond of the the first line and the last lines of the second and third stanzas. 
On an emotional level, I found myself being influenced very subtly by the presentation of nature and its small powers that were in the poem. It really got me thinking about the beauty of the desert and the lovely feel of the sun heating my skin.
In addition to the above quote, I would also like to offer you these additional compliments and suggestions on your work. 
The title is satisfactory, however, I felt as though a more appropriate title might be "Spring Awakes" or something along these lines. Anything that incorporates some of the magic the reader feels through the poem, back into the title. Phrasing it as "Spring Again" makes me, the reader, feel as though the narrator is explaining spring as something mundane that comes again and again. 
The setting is easy and difficult to determine at once. The reader can readily envision the season, but doesn't necessarily know where the narrator specifically is. I enjoyed the sense of mystery it left. 
The first line in the poem is a complete thought. Keeping no barriers between it and the next line presents the reader with a run-on sentence. I suggest a period or semi-colon.
