I thought that in general, this was good, but personally I dislike writings in present tense. It's just my own opinion, though most of the gramnar was correct, unless I missed some. Also, who did it? Why was she pregnant? Was it a careless night at the club or rapw? Specifying or even hinting would give your story more depth. But great overall. Keep writing! :)
I like this very much! I think it's great, just leave a little more spacing between the paragraphs so that It's not so confusing :) Also, what happened to Zeke? Why was his reaction to Terra's comment '“They also need to live on the ground, you know,” so explosive? Not including even at least a glimpse or clue of it leaves readers confused. But overall, I love this :D Hope to read more of your work soon :)
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