Hi there Scarlett! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this short, yet emotion filled poem. I love the use of beautiful imagery to describe the feelings for the girl you once liked. The use of the Sun and Moon's contrasts work incredibly well and portray gorgeous images throughout my head as I'm reading this.
'You are the sun,
I, the moon.'
Those lines have a lovely aura to them, and as you have repeated them towards the end, it refreshes my mind of their beauty.
Awesome piece, and I look forward to reading more of your poetry!
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