Love this poem again! Similar tone to the other one I reviews, almost humourous in its vengeful feel, but at the same time you really feel the pain of the writer. I love your style of writing poems :)
I really like this! Very beautiful imagery like when you say 'new babies moonlit swims', but at the same time thoughtful and slightly melancholic. Has a slightly dark feel to it.... but on the other hand makes you appreciate life more. Very Poem, im not one for writing really long poems, but I think it works here. The only bit I would change would be to change 'rips away youth' to something more dramatic and emotive like 'wrenches'. But thats just me being picky. Im not an expert!
In general, loved it!
I really liked this. Very touching. The rhyming adds to its effectiveness in my opinion. Generally not much more I can say, just very touching!
Keep writing!
Emily
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