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Hello I’m Em*waves hand* and I am reviewing your piece today! Please take my comments in the spirit they are offered; to help and encourage. Also keep in mind that I would not be giving you this review if I had not liked it! So without further babble I give you…*drum roll* my review!
This is review 2 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
This is a great poem in a very interesting form! I check out the link you set up and it is quite intriguing. I think you have done a great job wit it and I spotted no mistakes! There is one comma in the entire piece and I thought that was a bit odd but it is not detrimental in any way.
What I didn’t like so much!:
Nothing the vivid descriptions are great!
What I think could be better!:
Well other than the one little comma, there is abselutly nothing I would change in this poem!
What I think Overall!:
A great poem with deeper meaning and exact descriptions. I love the use of poetic devices and overall it is wonderful
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Hello I’m Em*waves hand* and I am reviewing your piece “ today! Please take my comments in the spirit they are offered; to help and encourage. Also keep in mind that I would not be giving you this review if I had not liked it! So without further babble I give you…*drum roll* my review!
This is review 1 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
The colour and the atmosphere in this are great! They coexsist wonderfully and you really painted a vivid picture in my mind of what you are describing!
What I didn’t like so much!:
Nothing! I think you did a wonderful job with such a challenging prompt, it is very difficult to write a poem starting with all the letters of the alphabet starting at P! But you have managed to have it sound and feel easy and a baeutiful read!
What I think could be better!:
Nothing keep it as it is!
What I think Overall!:
Great writing and the imagery is great! Aliens are attacking *eeek, runs away to hide*
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Hello there
I am so glad that I spotted your port!!
This piece is really great!
I love how you take every word and give it meaning.
and the only thing I have left to say is..
You are a great writer!
Never stop, and keep on sharing it with others
I really enjoyed reading this
Thanks for sharing it with us here at WDC
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Hello
I really enjoyed reading this piece!
The couplet form is very well expressed!
You have done a wonderful work in creating this piece
The form is so well preformed
And this adds greatly to the piece!
Overall a great piece
Thanks for sharing it with us!
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:Great Folder! So many wonderful items in it I am truely happy to have spotted it!
Overall Thoughts:Great I love it...what more can I say Keep writing!
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
OOh I am really interested in prose poems! they are so cool and ZI think you have pulled off this particular form really well!
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
I like the mix of monologue and poetry it creates a diverse atmosphere for your poem and I really enjoyed reading it!
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
Love the Halloween feel!
Overall Thoughts:
So many wonderful pooems in here! How have I lived without them?
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
Good thoughts that are expressed eloquently and with prescision! Congrats on the HM to
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
This is an easy read that keep the reader interested without forcing the thoughts upon them, I like that aspect the best
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
I like the repetition of the first line it adds a certain touch that eccentuates the poems originality, very well done!
Overall Thoughts:
Oooh your port is funfunfun Keep writing!
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
Very well written! It is a rather long pooem but it really captures the feel of the moment! I think youshould have these kind of dreams more often
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
The contesnt is so amazing The emotions simply roll off the page! I am having such a wonderful time perusing your port! This is great!
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
None once again. I reall think this one deserves the beautiful ribbon gracing it and I am so enthralled by the beauty of it...*speechless*
Overall Thoughts:
I am having such a wonderful time at your port:_) This is a beautiful poem thank for sharing it!
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
A second version of the last poem that I read...
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
I like this one a lot more than the last! It is much better constructed and I am happy o see that you worked hard to get this poem into ship-shape Great job with it!
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
none I like this revised form better it has a wee bit more depth ans it is simply better written...
Overall Thoughts:
I am very glad that you decided to revise it a bit this one is great! *reading more and more great pieces!*
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your piece.
}First impressions:
A very dark type of poem. Sort of reminiscent of the Black Parade" song...It is filled with emotions and I really thought it was well presented.
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
Interesting thoughts, deep and dark and very strong...
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
the lines are a bit wayward and this can disrupt the flow of the poem. I think a little more consistency is always a good thing in a poem. Even a free form
Overall Thoughts:
On to the next...*strides into the next poem*
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
Very interesting...I like it! You have written a great little fantasy Flash Fiction. I like the tone of the piece and the word choice really brings a certain something to the entire feel great!
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
I was wisked through this story It is really fast paced I loved it!
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
Slight flaws in the word placement disrupt the readers flow a little tweaking can fix that though
Overall Thoughts:
Wow I am getting really thankful I decided to check out your port! An interesting turn in my life
Em Brit-Girl
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
The second chapter of the last story I reviewed! And this is great! The writing is clear and well presented and the emotions and feelings expressed from the characters is very interesting.
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
Loved it! A fast pace read and I really like the ideas presented.
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
I see that the voice was intentional now and I think it works better in this chapter than the last. Overall well done
Overall Thoughts:
An intriging story! Well written and a great read. Keep writing!
Em Brit-Girl
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
Well I am always hesitant about reviewing stories but I really like this one! The plot, however short, is very interesting and the thoughts that you express through the characters is great!
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
Genma! Almost Emma almost..not really I like it though
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
some of the word choices are a little off and I would suggest that you use third person as the voice it is a little hard to follow otherwise. but other than that it is really good
Overall Thoughts:I am so glad that I decided to check out your port! You have so many great contests that I couldn't resist checking out your writing! And so fas I have not been disappointed
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
This is another wonderful poem! It has a depth to it that really pulls the reader into the piece and holds thier attention till the last. Very well done
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:Well the meaning is another wonderful thing! I like how this one exudes a certain atmosphere and that atmosphere is very beneficial to this piece!
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
The stanza length is a good 5 lines until the last one? I thought that was strange
Overall Thoughts:
Another wonderful poem! I will probably end up reviewing your port tonight hope that is good with you!
Em Brit-Girl
I am reviewing your piece today Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever another person says -- especially me! -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.
}First impressions:
This is awonderful metaphorical poem!I really like the deeper meaning and the emotions that you incorperate into this! Well done
Writer/Reader, Comment/Suggestions:
The metaphor is very powerful and it leaves the reader speechless!
Technical Comments/Suggestions:
Nothing to speak of...the line length varies from stanza to stanza you might try condensing it a little bit but that isn't crucial
Overall Thoughts:
A very well written poem that holds such a great meaning!
Em Brit-Girl
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Hello there
I am so glad that I spotted your port!!
This piece is really great!
I love how you take every word and give it meaning.
Your entire port is filled with wonderful items like this and the only thing I have left to say is..
You are a great writer!
Never stop, and keep on sharing it with others
I really enjoyed reading this
Thanks for sharing it with us here at WDC
Em
WRITE ON~!!! WRITE FOREVER~!!!!
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