I really enjoy westerns. I like the play of the man's reputation. I also really get behind well made, no nonsense villains. I hope to see more in the future!
I dig it. Not many people do the big brother looking out for the younger sister. When they do they rarely do it well. This is most excellent.
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You got a great grasp and the action was good. You might want to switch up your words a bit. Like the use of the word 'energy' when it is in the context of magic. Force. Arcane. Natural forces. Power...etc. Repetitive use of words and phrasing can lose the reader. I for one don't want to get lost because I look forward to what happens next.
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