Wow,
Very powerful images. I think you did a great job of making the reader feel very sorry for the father in such a short amount of time. Honestly, as the father was touring his newly "decorated" house, I couldn't help but feel angry at the son. But you managed to make the reader come down from that and feel sorrow right along side the father. Great job!
-Erik
Very eerie. I like the tone set early in the poem/short story. Very dark and morose. Great job at accomplishing many moods in such a short writing.
-Erik
Great, great tense story. So quick and to the point. And you managed to make the reader feel something for the sister in such a short amount of time. Very hard to pull off, but you managed to do just that. Not much characterization molded, but none needed! Congrats!!
Wow,
Great, great ending. I really liked the build up as well. Nice work with the imagery. Little Eugene kicking at "the loose, brown pebbles" while whistling was probably my favorite image. I also liked the image you created when he was walking on the rail. In such a short, short story, you managed to make the reader care for the two main characters. that's very hard to do. Great job!
-Erik
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