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Review of Writing.Com 101  Open in new Window.
for entry "Virtual Dice" Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Writing.Com 101  Open in new Window.
for entry "About Writing.Com" Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of 7-11  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello. I thought I would review the top-ranked reviewer. Your idea is original. I love the word ensconced. We don't use it enough. There are no obvious errors in your poem. I don't think that you went deep enough with your theme. It should be longer like a piece of classical music. Perhaps some analogies comparing the tunes to the couple's love. Thank you for sharing your poetry. Best of luck with your writing.


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Review of The Fun House  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello. I read your short story after browsing by type. Extremely well done. Your idea is original and clever. The dialogue is spot on for the character's ages. You include just the right mixture of suspense and action. The tone is dark. It could be darker. You've created a wonderfully scary and ominous mood. The writing reminds me of Ray Bradbury. Thank you for the great read. Good luck with your writing.


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Review of Be Afraid  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello. I read this piece of text because it was listed on the public review forum. This is a clever and witty piece. It made me smile. The dialog carries the plot and gives all of the information that is needed. That is difficult to do. I like the natural way that the characters talk. Well done.😁


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Review of Heat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello. I read this piece of text because it was listed on the public review forum. The format that you have chosen is well suited to this piece. You have used good word choice throughout this piece. The explanation is written clearly and succinctly. Well done.


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Review of Umbrella of Faith  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello. I read this piece of text because it was listed on the public review forum. Your rhyme scheme works well for this piece. The rhythm was off on some lines. Your chosen topic work well. The theme is identifiable. Overall, this piece works most excellent.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello. I read this piece of text because it was listed on the public review forum. The idea is clever and witty. The rhyme scheme is well done. The rhythm is a simple one. The word choice is adequate. Narrative poems are fun to read and write. Well written.😀


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello. I read this because it was listed on the public review forum. The idea is good. The development and organization are adequate. The writing could use more imagery. The word choice is a bit weak. The dialogue needs to be formatted. It is a bit confusing.


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello. I read this because it was listed on the public review forum. Personal memoirs are difficult for us to write. Your development is good. You have included the right amount of details. The order is logical and flows well. There are no major problems. When you go back to revise, work on two things: word choice and description.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello. I read this because it was listed on the public review forum. Wow. You really put a great deal of effort into this piece of text. Your idea is an excellent well developed one. Your organization is perfect. The word choice is adequate. I got a bit confused with portions of the dialogue.


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Review of Irony  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello. I read this poem because it was listed on the public review forum. I love the idea and theme of the poem. The development of the theme is adequate. You might add more imagery. The organization works well. The few lines that rhyme are well done. This poem is good.


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Review of Naked  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello. I read this because it was listed on the public review page. The theme of this poem is baring ourselves to our lover. That notion can be a bit brutal. Your imagery is spot on. I am reminded of the Sting song, EVERY BREATH YOU TAKE. The form works perfectly.


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Review of Writing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I read this because it was on the public review forum. The idea is appropriate, but the title doesn't represent the theme. The repetition works well, but it does lend itself to a poem for children. The rhythm works well in this poem. The tone is silly. The mood is light hearted.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read this because it was listed on the public review page. I watched my father die last year. The grieving never ends. Our best poetry comes from our tragedies. It is so easy to write about our joys. The poet must also show us his grief and not just tell us that he is said. This poem comes from your heart.


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Review of Silent Stones  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello. Your poem was listed in one of the newsletters that I read today. The title and topic are excellent. Poems with allusions to dead soldiers are always appropriate. My favorite part is the last stanza, especially the metaphor comparing the headstone to a mute storyteller. The first stanza is well-written. It would be better if it was told with more imagery like the final stanza.


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Review of User-Friendly  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I read this piece because it was listed on the public review forum. The exposition is excellent. You set the setting and characters very well. The development is good at first, but the ending seems rushed. I am assuming that you wanted to stay within the parameters of the word count expectations. I debated between a 3.5 and a 4 rating because of the rushed ending.


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Review of Cuba Calling  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I read this piece because it was listed in the public review forum. The idea and development are good. The organization is logical, but the lack of formatting makes it somewhat difficult to follow. Your voice is strong in this piece. It is hypnotic like the music you describe. Your word choice is adequate. You have used appropriate words for this piece. I chose a four star rating because of the formatting and the sense of disorganization it creates.


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Review of Blushing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, I read this because it was on the public review forum. I love the idea of this piece. I may be completely off course, but I think this is about phone sex. I love poetry that includes dialogue. It usually adds a touch of irony. I did get confused about who is speaking. Overall, the poem is quite clever.


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Review of Dreaming  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I read this because it was on the public review forum. The idea is an excellent one. Readers enjoy stories about folks who make it in spite of all odds. Your words are telling me things about the characters, but they need to show me.

For example, don't tell me that the boy is rich. Describe the car that he drove up in. Describe his clothes. Avoid using so many linking verbs.

You could take out the first paragraph. It adds nothing to the story.


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Review of Same Old Henry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a great exposition. It has everything that a short story needs. There is an adequate amount of development, although I don't know why Henry fired his gun. The word choice is adequate for a piece like this. The dialogue carries the plot forward.


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Review of Happy Family  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
The idea is a good one. It is like the secret garden type of story. Your organisation is good. You need to work on letting the reader know your characters in a different way. Show us, don't tell us. You need to work on the conventions also. The errors impede the understanding.


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Review of Almost  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I think I see that you have the beginnings of a good story here. The development is okay and the organization is adequate. You have several issues that need to be cleared up with grammar, usage, and mechanics. The errors do make it somewhat difficult to understand.


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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Wow. This is an intriguing exposition. Are you trying to decide whose viewpoint to tell the story from? I do like the way that you give us internal conflict. The imagery is good. You have a satisfying amount of sentence variety. I wish you had described the little creature more.


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