I have often read your work, and I always find myself satisfied, but this piece is truly great. you managed to fit so much emotion into such little space. It is truly a masterpiece. I can not find a single flaw in it. This piece is my favorite of all your pieces. please. Please. Write on.
When I read your poem, it seemed a bit all over the place, like you couldn't stay on topic. I mildly enjoyed this poem, because the imagery was good, but as I said you were jumping from idea to idea. I really like your title, it is intriguing and it fits the poem well.
hahaha I love the ending!!! SOO funny, and SOOO true, I am sure they are working on it though. anyways, over all this is a great poem. I really liked every part of it. there were no corrections that I would make if this peice were mine. write on.
Wow. I've been writing poetry for a few years now and I still cannot imagine writing something so beautiful. I am greatly humbled by your work. This is a truly great poem. My favorite thing about this poem is the fact that you are rebeling against the norm.
This poem allows the reader to empathize with your situation, though most people have not been through something of this nature. The poem flowed perfectly. I liked the fact that everything was out in the open and that nothing was hard to understand.
This is amazing. I also enjoy poetry, and I don't think I can write anything of this quality. Could you please help me to become better, by reviewing me peices. Thank you kindly
This poem was really great! there are just two things that seem a little off. The last line would sound better if it was " fear is nothing but a lie" and " fear hopes it's how it comes unfurled." is a bit confusing. Other than that, this was amazing! Please, keep writing :D
This is very good. very well organized and rather addictive. I read it all the way to the end. The plot was very good. The characters were believable. This screen play is very believable. Keep writing and you skill will most definately evolve. More descriptive next time love.
This is .. weird... in an artistic way. I don't really understand it... but it sounds like an expression of your emotion. and thats all that art really is expression of emotion. the quality is judged on how clear it is. if this is clear to you then the rating is a 5.0 since everyone is different, i don't see the same things clear like you do.
I am mostly just a poetry girl. ill admit that . but this story.... it had me hooked til the very last word. I hate reading off of my computer, but i read this story through and through. It held my attention better than anything else ive ever read. The characters were insanely believeable. I felt a connection to them, like they were friends. The story, the images, the plot , characters... everything was totally spotless. i am in love with this
I really liked this peice. Firstly because of the ending. It leaves it open, like something more will happen. When peices end like this the reader can almost see the rest of the persons life strech infront of them. The topic was good and the tile was very accentric
Ok, So this story has me all twisted up inside. It was confusing and unorganized. One moment one character was light and the next it was dark. I see characters as a representation of a singular emotion. maybe you should add more characters since you put so manyemotions inside of this story. I love you style it is amazing and insparational, but needs to be more organzied.. maybe a graphic organizer?
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