I feel this, i have anxiety and yay i have a semi-photographic memory. Regret is such an interesting this to describe and frankly quite difficult to do so, but you did an incredible job in showing that emotions through words, something that I struggle to so so props to you for that.
This is yeah, I have three brothers and that's how all arguments went when we were kids. You get it all out at a young age, you get all your arguements and pettiness out at a young age against your siblings. Other than that the transition was a bit abrupt and I think it sort of works for the story
I thought your story was good, it was poetic and felt real. Well real and not real all at the same time. The descriptions are great and it paints a beautifully vivid picture of the setting. The first line being used as the last line works perfectly for the way you did it.
The last part was really funny, and is so relatable, I can admit to having left things in the fridge thath ad no business being there. This story is short, funny and a good lighthearted read instead of being pruductive today
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