It was well written. It was clear and I think I only caught a couple mistakes. I think the idea is good but the way in which it was told was a little cheesy. I like the idea of a guardian angel. But it would make the story distinctive if you told it with bit of edge. Make the guardian angel part not so obvious. Let Ellen not know for sure but wonder.
I think a little bit of work could make this piece pretty good. I like the way you travel from a depressing rainy day to the meaning of life to finding love. It makes sense. As you said in your preamble, this is just some late night rambling. Do a couple revisions and put some strength into the words.
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