I understood right away the message contained in your poem. its a good read, yet it left me hanging without a sense of help or hope that as people we are not as lost as it seems. Very political
A very humorous story. I laughed all the way through it and could actually see the people and episodes that were described. you did an excellent job in being discriptive, the character of each was captured vividly. I loved the idea of the story being written in a conversational style, for me that gave it such a natural appeal. My only tip would be; to develop the conversations by using adequate amounts of prepositions through out your story, so that it feels more connected and free flowing. Otherwise, I loved it! you seem to be a natural humorous storyteller. Keep your humor and be INCREDIBLE daily.
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