Hi, :Hello, Genipher,
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The topic of your submission intrigued me. I have to stop and read your viewpoint and share my take away.
Formatting
Formatting fits well for this exposition. So I will not belabor you and me in hashing the nitty-gritty of punctuation marks and such.
*Content and Point of View
I am impressed with your exposition from the biblical point of view with references to the conception in the woman’s womb.
Indeed, I totally agree with your adherence to what the scripture teaches. This topic intrigued me because just last week at my Writer’s Bloc critiquing workshop, there was a discussion about when a woman conceives. There was an assertion from some participants that “sexual intercourse is conception.” I disagreed with this notion because what I know is that conception happens when the sperm fertilizes the egg in the womb. But I was told not to argue and just accept the suggestion to replace the word I used from conceiving to pregnancy. That did not set right in my thinking process and I did a thorough research on the subject matter. So let me share with you the outcome of my diligent research on this controversial issue..
So when does conception occur? It can happen as soon as thirty minutes after ejaculation during sexual intercourse, or it can take several days. It’s all about timing An egg can be fertilized between twelve to twenty-four hours after it’s released into the fallopian tubes. After that time, the egg cell starts to deteriorate and after twenty-four hours it can no longer be fertilized. However, sperm survival rates are high, and can survive in the female reproductive tract for up to five days awaiting an egg to fertilize. Depending on where one is in her menstrual cycle, then, conception would potentially happen a few days after sexual intercourse. While they live longer than egg cells, sperm cells do die off over time too so if one is trying to get pregnant it’s best not to time sex too far advance of ovulation. Having intercourse the day before ovulation may increase ones chances of conceiving - but to do this, one needs to know when she ovulates. Pregnancy does not start on the day of conception I t’s not a moment but a process, and there are a number of biological steps that need to happen before pregnancy can be confirmed. Conception usually happens between eleven and twenty-one days after ones’ last period, of course, individual cycles are different so this can vary from person to person. This means it is hard to determine the exact date of conception; however, most women know roughly then their last period was. If one is pregnant, this is how healthcare professionals will calculate the due date.: by counting forty weeks from the date of the last menstrual period. Does conception always lead to pregnancy? No. There are various reasons for this, which include: low sperm count, issues with sperm mobility, anovulation (when one is not ovulating), implantation failure ( the fertilized egg does not attach to the uterine lining, decreasing sperm quality, decreasing amount of quality eggs, overall health of both partners, pelvic infections (previous or current). There are different factors at play when it comes to how long it takes to get pregnant.
How do we know if conception occurred? More than likely no one knows that conception has taken place, as there as usually no signs or symptoms - although some women experience spotting when the fertilized egg cell implants into the uterine wall - this is known as implantation bleeding. And the common signs of pregnancy are: a missed period, frequent urination, feeling tired, nausea, sore or swollen breast, spotting, headaches, mood swings.
Reference: Cleveland Clinic (myclevelandclinic.org)
Anyhoo, without going further into more details, suffice it to say that my writing critiques had a misconception of the difference between sexual intercourse and conception. And I’m going to write about it to refute their wrongful assertion. Meanwhile, I do appreciate your work and thorough research from the biblical standpoint of who ultimately controls our destiny when it comes to bearing children to leave a lasting legacy of our ancestry and heritage.
*Dialogue
The only suggestion I would make is to employ dialogue to show your characters interacting with each other to break the monotony of straight narration. Dialogues put the reader in the head of the narrator, character, or author.
*Disclaimer
I hope my observations and suggestions can help you tighten some loose ends relating to the mechanics in writing. Keep in mind, though, that these are from one reader's point of view. As such, take it with a grain of salt. The decision to adopt or discard suggestions is your prerogative.
*Over-all take away. Write on. You’re on the right track, Genipher.
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P.S. My apologies if you find typos in this review. My desktop is on the fritz so I’m using my iPad. The fonts on my iPad are so tiny. I cannot see well.
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