Beautiful and heartfelt. I really enjoyed it and most importantly - felt it. Just a friendly remark - the rhythm is great until the 12th line, I had to slow down a little to read it the way it was written. Maybe think about adding an "a" somewhere there to make it a little more natural. Other than that it is a lovely piece and I enjoyed it very much.
My overall impression
It was a very nice piece of poetry. I enjoyed it very much. The rhythm is good and it is easy to read.
Tips for improvement
I think that all is perfect until the very last line. It goes with the portrait of the picture, but I feel like the rhyme is a little off. But this is just my opinion.
I'm looking forward to reading some other writings. Nicely done.
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