simply intense, filled with very interesting ideas, and I am sure will one day be world famous. I am for sure glad this story is not pasted on real life, it's not right?!
Once again I'm left gasping for more, such a intense story, so many twists at each turn that are so exciting and keep the reading with wishes the tale will never come to an end. Great job, still can't wait to read more
Wow, that story sucked me in, I can't wait to read more, through the whole thing I kept wanting more, it would make for a great novel, a real page turner. I think as a reader I wanted more to know about Attie, and I felt I was wondering the whole time more and more what age she really was, but more then anything more of her past. Other then that it I think it will really be a best selling novel, a great idea. I think it was a outstanding chapter!
It's quiet wordy but I like that, keep in mind thought that not everyone does. I fall in love with the topic you choice it should reach out a hand to anyone. The ending kept me wanting so mcuh more and I'm thinking that maybe this would be a really good idea for a chapter book, explaining how he fades away, with evil forces at work or something, for a short story you put in the perfect amount of information I feel, and I won't be the only one after reading this that is speechless and begging you as a writer for more. I truly loved this story, the ending was amazing, uneplainable and the last two phographs were my favorite by far, really gripping me into the story and amking me want to read it again and again, GREAT WORK, QUIT YOUR DAY JOB BECAUSE YOU HAVE TALENT IN THIS!
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