I enjoyed reading this. Ten stanzas is impressive, and I like how you brought the message through. Went deep, then brought it back to the reality of the present, and ending on a tranquil note.
A nice, subtle twist to the original story. I like the touch of modernism with the father going over to war and John being able to save little Sally's Christmas. This would be a great idea for a commercial.
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