I found this to be an interesting read, I definitely enjoyed the "toon" concept. Perhaps maybe some Foghorn Leghorn at some point? Or maybe you already did, and I just have yet to read your other parts.
This was pretty well written in the sense that you keep the story moving at a good pace, and I found myself reminiscing about "Loony Toons" as I read.
Oh there was a part...
"but Lia only knew to be crunchy and sticky beneath her feet. "
I think there's a word or two missing in there. Aside from that I didn't really notice any errors.
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