I love the idea you are going for in your poem. You paint a very dark and dreary picture that does well to envelop the imagination. I'm reading your title: Hope Defiant, and see that you want to achieve perhaps a sort of contrast between the bigger, louder chaos, and the silent, subtle hope that does not go away. The contrast of hope against the chaos is not very strong, but you are well on your way there. I do not know if your approach for hope is intended to be subtler or more powerful.
The 6th and 7th stanza are a little confusing. It is not easily to relate to, nor is it fully clear what you are intending to portray. Perhaps you can elaborate or make the verses more concise.
If I perhaps misunderstood your piece, please do clarify for me. Thank you for writing such a wonderful poem.
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