First I want to say that the writing definitely shows a true love and appreciation of what you see as your higher power. That being said it seems to be a little all over the place and lacking a bit of focus. The potential is there, I see it, but without focus it lacks any real deep impact in my opinion.
First off I want to say great job on the poem, it shows a lot of potential for you as a writer. I definitely like the theme of Rational verses Irrational thought, I hope that I got that right, and the premise that rational thought can give way to irrational thoughts in a blur. Overall great poem and look foreward to seeing what else you create
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