This was very moving and I do thank you for asking me to read it. i did read every word and felt the things you did. i would change one thing which is about the girls your sisters and yourself to not say me before your sisters is the only thing i would correct. You are an excellent writer andI have enjoyed my time reading this great piece. Happy Holidays. cubby
This is so true. It is with the pen, the pencil,, the marker, the ieyboard that an author will finding himself or herself writing it is something innat3 in us to do. The writing is something that is a calling and it is a career that people have. It is something that I must do or feel barren. I liked your piece ever so much.
Tthis was an interesting piece of work.i enjoyed the story very much. I think that with the title General that it should be capitlialized. that way you aredistinguishin the General from the otherss.
What a beautiful piece of poetry this is! You say that your soul wants to fly and there are other things you have in mind about yourself. The words are crystal clear and you have done well in making this up. You mentioned that your soul wants to glow and other things too. I hope that you get what you want in this life and be happy. Keep writing.
What a beautiful prayer this is. You have done well in putting this together for us to read. It was a good reading by the way. You painted some great pictures with your words that you used so well. You did a good job and it shows how well ou did for there ar no errors found on the page. Keep writing.
What a beautiful piece this is! You are speaking from your heart when you wrote this. It is clear as the nose on your face that you did it fromthe heart when you wrote it. It is a beautiful piece and one that I am glad that I clicked and thank you for sharing it with us. Keep writiing.
This was a great piece of poetry. You made me want to cry and I haven't cried in over five years. But anyway, you did a good job with this piece. Your heart was given to Lily. You made that clear and understood. It is something else for you to have written this and for me to remember a lady named Lily. I am glad that you did it caused me to think of her fondly. Keep writing.
This is truly a tribute to the mothers out here in the world. You have captured the beauty of a mother and how she does for her chiildren. She never tires to do the things that she must do and she will feed you when you are hungry. It is a marvelous thing for one to have a mother and know that she will care for you. Keep writing.
it is so hard to discuss love . But you have the impact of spreeading love to one you are with. It is a beautiful thing.. You have colored your words well. They set up a picture that is worthy of seeing. You have my full attention. Keep writinng.
This is a wake up call for all of us to be in the same position. pain nor sorrow shall win in the end. You have preseted a great piece here and it is well done. You did well in presenting this piece of literature for the purpose of a review. yo udid a good job. Keep writing.
It is somewhat difficult to have read this piece. I know that you were talking and then Miles was thinking or talking I followed through on that. It is just so difficult to see the two of them conversing back and forth like you had them. Maybe what you should have done is to have spaced it apart by a line or two. Keep writing.
Very well done and the music certainly was there. You did a good job at pieceing this together. one could hear the melodies that you put into this piece. I loved it all and wanted you to know that. You did well in presenting this piece of literature for the purpose of a review. You did a good job and it shows how well you did. Keep writing.
What an exciting piece of work this is! You were dressed in your wetsuit and was there without anything in the form of money or anything. It is what I am getting from the piece. You had wound up at a party and the one guy asked you if you were ready to party down . You did and was pleased with the outcome. I know you may be saying huh to this but that his what I am getting from the message. Please explain it to me so I will know for sure. Thank you. Keep writing.
What a beautiful story. This is something that amazes me and had me locked up with you in your delimma. The time you felt that you were going to be free was the time that you didnt' figure on. Then the thud happened. You painted a great picture with the colors you chose to use. Keep on writing.
There is beauty in this piece of poetry. It is admirable that you are so fond of your kitty. That as you said it was priceless. I wish for you a long healthy life with the cat. Do you call the cat the Flower? You mentioned about the word flower and it stuck. I loved reading this piece and look for more of the same from you. Keep writing.
What a perdiciment to be in! I am sorry to hear about the way that things have become for you. I know you dont' want my pity or anything like iti but I do feel for you. The way you described her would become irritating to me as well. you wonder if she still loves you the way she did or not. That is a question that only she can answer. I hope you get the answers you seek. Keep on writing.
What a beautiful piece this is ! You are giving God the credit for being with you through the bad times in your life like you were using The Footprints in the Sand as a springboard for the piece you did. You used your colors well in making this picture come to life. Keep writing.
It s a beautiful piece of work. You did everything well in using the words you used and painting the pictures you painted were life like. The young man wanted her to come with him and for them to be a couple. When she turns out to be married already to someone else. Keep writing.
Physical abuse is seen here in so many ways. Not only phyiscal but emotional pain as well. It is a sad commentary for the people in this piece be they characters or real people. It is with a sense of failure on the page that you had to write such a heart wrenching piece. The reading was a good one. Don't get me wrong on that note. Your work was well done. Keep on writing.
This is a great piece of work. You have enlightened me on the norms of the people over there in India. I believe it was india that is coming from. The normals are not normal here at all. For it is so right for the woman to work outside of the home and many have to in order to get by. I can understand and do understand the normal of getting married to a young man and have him to provide for the family. Keep writing.
I liked everything about this piece but the references to God. You spelled God with the lowercase letters and He is uppercase at all times. It is sad that the way things have to be fall upon the children. It is sad that the commentary is lost to the child who wants better. You have a great piece on your hands here. I am glad that I clicked it. Keep writing.
WHEW! What a great piece of poetry this is! you have taken a scene from the piece to build upon it. Ghosts and demons are all around and you want us to avoid them as we descend from the stairs. I am getting this from the message and hope that I am right about it. Keep writing.
The subject is love in the greatest sense of the word. It is a piicture that greatly is enhanced by the colors you used well. You did a good job with this piece. You did well in presenting this piece of literature for the purpose of a review. You did an excellent job here with this piece. Keep writing.
Are you a cutter? It seems that you are and that you did this to yourself. You were talking about hiding go seek. The next thing I knew you were talking about the red paint on your shirt. Then, it got bigger somehow. Are you sure your'e not a cutter? I hate to think that you were and there is no help for yourself. There is help but it takes seeing a doctor. You made a believer out of me with this piece. I would venture to say that it is the character you have in mind other than yourself. Keep writing.
Seems as though I have run into another cutter. it is really sad that it has to be this way for you to cut yourself or anyone to do that. I don't know why one has to cut themselves n order to prove something to themselves. The part that got me thinking about it was the part where you said scarlet robed. Keep writing.
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/harycubbybear
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.42 seconds at 12:34am on Nov 23, 2024 via server WEBX1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
