The first paragraphs felt a little disjointed, but after that the story became very enjoyable- and even touching! The characters were sympathethic and believable, and Raven's thoughts on Dimitri made me smile more than once. Somehow I knew from the start both of them were vampires; was that your intention?
I love this. The concept is really original and your writing superb. I particularly like the way the narrator recounts the story and his manner of speech, and the atmosphere is both engaging and full of nostalgia. Well done!
I found this deeply moving, and, to a degree- I can't imagine what you are going through-, I identify with it. You have a clear and powerful voice, please keep writing! And, as empty as this sounds, never stop enjoying each and everyday of your life.
(Loved the "infusion of caffeine" pun!)
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