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Review Style
I am fair and honest. I critique solely by content with no regard to spelling and grammar.(unless it's so obvious I cannot help it.)
I'm good at...
When I review poetry I am good at finding imagery, alliteration, meter, personification and similar things. when I review short fiction, I look for character development(if relevant), use of action verbs(generally one element that keeps the story "shown" rather than "told." )I also look for plot, point of view, and others.
Favorite Genres
psychological, dark, death, mystery, horror
Least Favorite Genres
erotica
Favorite Item Types
poems and short fiction
Least Favorite Item Types
non statics, novels
I will not review...
non statics
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Review of Melancholic Days  Open in new Window.
Review by Hester Prynne Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
hi, first off I want to say that these are my thoughts and opinions only, take them with a grain of salt if you like.

I found the first stanza very powerful, the imagery really conveyed emotional turmoil
which is clearly the theme of this piece
as the poem progresses I can FEEL the overwhelming fear and darkness set in.
you did an amazing job with that.

towards the end the magnitude of this poem seems to dwindle, particularly in the final stanza.
although the final line

"I know my emotions are my own to feel"

is very profound it could be much stronger, and I would encourage you to make this stanza your grand finale. final stanza should always be at least as strong as the first.


I don't know if the repetition of "I know" in the final stanza is intentional but it takes away from the beauty of the poem rather than adds to it.

great potential here! keep writing!!! ty
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Review by Hester Prynne Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
very interesting topic you chose to pursue. and you pulled it off with shooting stars. for who on this earth has not onetime imagined getting sucked into a gaping black hole? You begin the poem with energy to keep the reader interested, the body tells the tale loaded with energy and the grand finale keeps its promise to mesmerize and tie it all together! ty I really enjoyed reading this
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Review of Red Tears  Open in new Window.
Review by Hester Prynne Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
While I would love more insight into this piece, I found it beautiful. Why? Because you drew a wonderful mental image... softly luring the reader in. I longed for more and this is both good and bad for in writing you want to draw the reader in and leave them a bit curious. But at the same time I have about 100 questions.

were the red tears related to blood?
are the "stages, we color" related to mood as in bi-polar disorder?
is this about a murder of sorts?
I am referring to the butcher knife
and why the vomit?
the list goes on.
but still a wickedly awesome poem
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