Aww, I feel a emotional for this couple! This poem is written very well. I can really feel the longing emotion from the character. The personality of the character was realistic; I like that. It's so sad, yet romantic. Nicely done!
Cute poem! I love the imagery. The simple descriptions really went well with this poem. I love the lines "Swirling," and "Paperwings." That just really created a great image for me. Nicely done!
Awwww! Very nice poem! I can just imagine everything that is taking place from hearing the cry of the boy, to seeing the father bending down. Great descriptions! It was really funny as well. Nicely done!
Wow, nicley done! I just love the description of the flower, I can just see that bright yellow and golden color. And the word "oasis" is the perfect word. Great imagery. Thanks for sharing. :)
I loved this! The title caught my attention and I thought it was going to be a short, silly poem but this is really good. The metaphors are great and set an awesome image in my mind. The poem was relatively fun and playful, but the last line really gave it a twist. Nicely done! :)
Very descriptive and emotional. I appreciate how you included a little personal life with the mother. It was very sad, but I'm assuming that's what your intentions were, so nicely done expressing the emotion of the poem. I absolutely love the last line. Great job!
This poem is very short and emotional. I like how you could make me feel the "misery" throughout the poem. Maybe you're talking about a partner or a friend? Maybe more clarity on that, but bedsides that, very good! Nicely done! Thank you. :)
I read the first couple of lines and began drooling for some coffee. I could just imagine the smell and look of it in my coffee mug. I really loved how you described it so well. I was a little confused when you brought in Mrs. Pyne and the doctor, but it came together at the end. Really made me smile.
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